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PostSubject: Sarah Onishi, a shadow of her former self   Mon Feb 27, 2017 1:11 pm


[Sarah Onishi]

SL Username: Saarrah Resident
SL Display Name: Sarah Onishi
Character Name: Sarah Onishi
Age: 20
Race: Human, with minor cybernetic implants
Origin: She does not remember. But she woke up in the forest, not far from Hajime.
Occupation: Sarah’s education being, inasmuch as she remembers, limited to basic skills and knowledge, she lives as a day worker, mostly for hard physical labor.
Affiliation: N/A

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Personality: Generally quiet, although she sometimes is a chatterbug. Gentle, hard worker, always ready to help even if it involves risks.
Positive Traits/Strengths:

  • Her implants make her very strong and tireless
  • She would rather take risks than miss an opportunity
  • She is easily contented
  • ----


Negative Traits/Weaknesses:

  • Her implants make her easy to detect and torture with the right equipment
  • She would rather take risks than miss an opportunity
  • She eats like four (although she works like ten)
  • She is too trusting


Likes:

  • Working, exercising, running topless
  • Cookies
  • ----
  • ----


Dislikes:

  • Any form of perceived injustice
  • Insects, arachnids, rodents
  • ----
  • ----


Hobbies:

  • N/A
  • ----
  • ----
  • ----


Fun Facts/Quirks:

  • N/A
  • ----
  • ----
  • ----


Sexual Orientation: Undetermined and uninterested

Personal Inventory:

  • The clothes she is wearing
  • ----
  • ----
  • ----


Specialized Equipment:

  • N/A
  • ----
  • ----
  • ----

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Combat Abilities:
Sarah is a LOT stronger than she looks and has a superior stamina, equivalent to those of a very strong male athlete and fighter. She also possesses an uncanny ability at feeling, sensing the attacks, even in her back.

Combat weaknesses:
Sarah has very little conscious experience in fighting. She carries no weapons and no armor.
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Character Backstory:
Sarah has been abducted after her parents were killed by her abductors. She was fifteen at the time. For five years she was submitted to horrible experiments aiming at combining new cybernetic nano-implants to a human body in order to enhance it and make her a super fighter. Sarah has those implants everywhere in her body, but mostly in the head and torso. They are designed to enhance her, but also to control her with excruciating pain. They are absolutely impossible to detect.

When Sarah escaped, her pursuers could not find her. To avoid being ratted on and found, they sent a signal which essentially reset Sarah’s brain. She remembers nothing of the last five years, and not that much of the preceding fifteen. So there she is, alone in a city she knows nothing about, unable to even remember where she came from and how she arrived there…


Last edited by Sarah Onishi on Tue Feb 28, 2017 7:06 am; edited 3 times in total (Reason for editing : Add a bit to the backstory.)
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PostSubject: Re: Sarah Onishi, a shadow of her former self   Fri Mar 03, 2017 2:49 pm

Okiis so I have a question on what you have under abilities

"Strength and Stamina equivalent to those of a very strong male athlete and fighter"
Does this mean they hit harder? Move faster than normal people? Please elaborate a little bit.

"Possesses an uncanny ability at feeling, sensing the attacks, even in her back."
Does this mean she's able to sense oncoming dangers. Kinda like Spiderman's Spidey-Sense?
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PostSubject: Re: Sarah Onishi, a shadow of her former self   Fri Mar 03, 2017 4:22 pm

She hits harder than she looks capable of, not as a world champion, but as a very good fighter. She has been enhanced for that. She has been trained. She just doesn't remember her training. Although she punches the bag in the gym like a champ.

And it could be assumed that the nano-implants play a role in that ability, and it could be compared to spider sense. Maybe not as acute as Peter Parker, but still useful.

Parameters could be refined if necessary.
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PostSubject: Re: Sarah Onishi, a shadow of her former self   Fri Mar 03, 2017 10:32 pm

Okay so to hit harder, you'd say a Moderate instead of a Minor? We have a tier system for Damage and Health ratios. All information can be found Here

Just looking mainly for these ratios.
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PostSubject: Re: Sarah Onishi, a shadow of her former self   Sat Mar 04, 2017 4:16 am

Those who "enhanced" her most certainly wanted her to be in the Severe tier. But that's not an option for newcomers, I know

Since the job has not been completed before her escape and memory reset; considering that she does not have the "killer instinct" that was supposed to be hers; but she still has received the full set of nano-implants, I would like to have her set at Heavy.

If you know of the "Buffy the Vampire Slayer" movie and TV series, think Kristy Swanson (the movie) in less air-headed with the protector instinct of Sarah Michelle Gellar (the series): a super-strong girl, who has no idea of her abilities, but with a good heart and the desire to help those who need something she can give.

A good girl who looks harmless but can kick ass better than a lot of guys.
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PostSubject: Re: Sarah Onishi, a shadow of her former self   Sat Mar 04, 2017 3:16 pm

I'd say take a look at some of our approved sheets to get a better grasp as to how much damage things do. No one new has more than a Moderate in damage unless they have some sort of weakness to balance it out like taking extra damage from a kind of attack such at Blunt, Piercing, Fire based, Water based, Wind based, etc. So I'd have your powers, thus far, explained like this:

Sarah is a LOT stronger than she looks and has a superior stamina, equivalent to those of a very strong male athlete and fighter. Because of this, her natural hits are a Moderate instead of a Minor.

Sarah also possesses an uncanny ability at feeling her area, sensing the attacks, even in her back.
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PostSubject: Re: Sarah Onishi, a shadow of her former self   Sat Mar 04, 2017 4:49 pm

Combat weaknesses:
Sarah has very little conscious experience in fighting. She carries no weapons and no armor. Wounds of the piercing type (blades, firearms) are more destructive for her, although temporarily, than for regular people, because it disturbs the nano-implant network, which then has to repair itself.

Something like that. And we set her strength at Heavy.
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PostSubject: Re: Sarah Onishi, a shadow of her former self   Sat Mar 04, 2017 6:25 pm

Her strength would not be able to be at Heavy because we dont allow more than a Moderate for new people.

As for her being able to repair herself, that would count as an ability and thus should be on your sheet as something like this:

Sarah is able to repair herself after taking damage. She is able to repair minor damage once per round.

For the Combat weakness have it as followed:
Combat weaknesses:
Sarah has very little conscious experience in fighting. She carries no weapons and no armor. Wounds of the piercing type (blades, firearms) are more destructive for her. [+1 tier Damage from Piercing damage]
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PostSubject: Re: Sarah Onishi, a shadow of her former self   Sun Mar 05, 2017 3:26 am

I guess I will have to rewrite it all then. Because that's not at all how I see my character.
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PostSubject: Re: Sarah Onishi, a shadow of her former self   Tue Mar 07, 2017 4:52 pm

Im merely saying make it a Moderate rather than a Heavy. So you understand a Moderate is 3x stronger than a normal human hit. If that's too low for you and thus making you reconsider your character then by all means. Im merely telling you the rules we have in place which are all explained. Good luck in your designing.
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PostSubject: Re: Sarah Onishi, a shadow of her former self   Wed Mar 08, 2017 6:55 am

OK. What follows is the new sheet, incorporating your advice and rewriting a couple minor things.

One observation though: the Tier description should be updated. It currently says that only Severe is not available to new members.

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[Sarah Onishi]

SL Username: Saarrah Resident
SL Display Name: Sarah Onishi
Character Name: Sarah Onishi
Age: 20
Race: Human, with performance and strength enhancing cybernetic nano-implants
Origin: She does not remember. But she woke up in the forest, not far from Hajime.
Occupation: Sarah’s education being, inasmuch as she remembers, limited to basic skills and knowledge, she lives as a day worker, mostly hard physical labor.
Affiliation: N/A

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Personality: Generally quiet, although she sometimes is a chatterbox. Gentle, hard worker, always ready to help even if it involves risks to her own safety.
Positive Traits/Strengths:

  • Her implants make her very strong and almost tireless
  • She would rather take risks than miss an opportunity
  • She is easily contented
  • ----


Negative Traits/Weaknesses:

  • Her implants make her easy to detect and torture with the right equipment
  • She would rather take risks than miss an opportunity
  • She eats like four (although she works like ten)
  • She is too trusting


Likes:

  • Working, exercising and running topless
  • Cookies and milk
  • ----
  • ----


Dislikes:

  • Any form of perceived injustice
  • Insects, arachnids, rodents
  • ----
  • ----


Hobbies:

  • N/A
  • ----
  • ----
  • ----


Fun Facts/Quirks:

  • N/A
  • ----
  • ----
  • ----


Sexual Orientation: Undetermined and uninterested

Personal Inventory:

  • The clothes she is wearing
  • ----
  • ----
  • ----


Specialized Equipment:

  • N/A
  • ----
  • ----
  • ----

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Combat Abilities:
Sarah is a LOT stronger than she looks and has a superior stamina, equivalent to those of a very strong male athlete and fighter. Because of this, her natural hits are a Moderate instead of a Minor.

Sarah also possesses an uncanny ability at feeling her area, sensing the attacks, even in her back.

Sarah is able to repair herself after taking damage. She is able to repair minor damage once per round.

Combat weaknesses:
Sarah has very little conscious experience in fighting.

Sarah carries no weapons and no armor.

Wounds of the piercing type (blades, firearms) are more destructive for Sarah. [+1 tier Damage from Piercing damage]
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Character Backstory:
Sarah has been abducted after her parents were killed by her abductors. She was fifteen at the time. For five years she was submitted to horrible experiments aiming at combining new cybernetic nano-implants to a human body in order to enhance it. Sarah has those implants everywhere in her body, but mostly in the head and torso. They are designed to enhance her, but also to control her with excruciating pain. They are absolutely impossible to detect.

When Sarah escaped, her pursuers could not find her. To avoid being ratted on and found, they sent a signal which essentially reset Sarah’s brain. She remembers nothing of the last five years, and not that much of the preceding fifteen. So there she is, alone in a city she knows nothing about, unable to even remember where she came from and how she arrived there…
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PostSubject: Re: Sarah Onishi, a shadow of her former self   Wed Mar 08, 2017 5:00 pm

First off, I'll be posting something for you so you can see the restrictions upon character creation and quoting it for you.
Here's a post where it deliberately says the following:

Amai Fade wrote:

Small Restrictions on Character Creation

****We understand that people normally do not like restrictions on the creation of their characters! However, this actually serves a purpose here, at Hajime! Characters are meant to grow, change over time. People meet, interact, socialize or completely ignore one another due to something that has happened. Characters choose paths that can change their entire lives in a matter of seconds. Due to these things being what we want our RolePlayers to feel and experience, we have decided that restricting newer characters would help influence roleplay and get characters meeting other people or even seeking new faces out for the sake of their development.

Each new character which you meet could change your entire reason for walking the streets of Hajime. Could change the way you view yourself or those that you call your friends, family and comrades. We want all of our roleplayers, our creators of content and society, to watch their character develop and thus, restrictions will be raised as characters progress through rankings of factions or just spending time in the city.****


When building a new character, please keep in mind the restrictions which will be listed below! Of course, each of these restrictions are lightened based on which factions your character is apart of. Examples of these bonus attributes from each faction can be found here at The Factions of Hajime City. Each faction has their own perks as well as weaknesses.

Weaponry: New characters should NOT have any weapons which one cannot find or buy at a sports store or hardware store. This means items such as Firearms[ALL], Poisons, Narcotics, Explosives, and Specialized Blades.

Scaling: New Characters should not have ANY skill that does above a moderate in damage! While this is a tad unfortunate, it helps us to balance the individuals around. It is easy to get stronger by just being in the city! So please keep such in mind!

Healing: New Character will not have a heal that does more than a moderate in total! Meaning, if you have 3 uses of a healing spell, it will only do Minor healing each unless you are part of a faction which allows amplified healing!

Secondly, I'd like to say thank you for making the adjustments to your sheet! Spot on! Thank you for complying and working with me!
Welcome to Hajime!

You are Tier 5 - Health Pool: 1 Heavy
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PostSubject: Re: Sarah Onishi, a shadow of her former self   Tue Apr 25, 2017 2:19 am

GUESS WHAT! There was an update! Go ahead and just change up your sheet according to the new format listed Here! Best of luck! Hope to approve soon! Just respond below to let us know you're ready to be checked!

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